Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
The orchids shivered
to the sound of
raw fingers on
your old guitar,
smell of tarnish, metal
and un-calloused skin -

the only songs you know
are your father's
lullabies and a
Christian rock band's
greatest hit,
four cords strong.

Played on hot weekends
with the windows open,
twelve years old again,
fat against the waistband
of Walmart jeans
and straw hair stuck
to your forehead
in humid summer air.

I can't feel you here,
in the apartment,
know you're twelve years back
in time,
in a different town,
with no stubble on your chin.
kelsey malie - april 2013
Add a Comment:
 

Daily Deviation

Given 2014-01-23
Beautiful, evocative: Twelve by ~ejectionletter ( Featured by neurotype )
:iconayeaye12:
AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Student Writer
Hot sweet yes damn yes hot sweet.

Pretty much. Fantastic stuff, definitely deserving of a DD. 
Reply
:iconbuilt1963:
built1963 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
Now that is poetry.
Reply
:iconjuls0077:
juls0077 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
mmm k you are awesome. I have not read a modern poem worth anything until now. Pop Poetry lets bring it back! I write poetry but have never had the courage to make any public. I love it great job!
Reply
:icontruthistruth:
TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on your Daily Deviation! Clap
Reply
:icon1jackson234:
1jackson234 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
Spellbound
Reply
:iconshadowedacolyte:
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I enjoyed reading and rereading this, getting a bit lost in its sense of time. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
Reply
:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
Reply
:iconrobson666:
robson666 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation Clap
Reply
:iconssensory:
ssensory Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014   Writer
Ccongrats on the well deserved DD!
Reply
:iconindaluna:
indaluna Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
this evokes such a strong sense of place
i love ittt
Reply
:iconarchelyxs:
archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
I'm really glad to see new writing from you. :heart:
Reply
:icondamagedhomewrecker:
DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i love the imagery. just beautiful.
Reply
:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
"The orchids shivered"

totally sucked me in immediately! i miss your work (and tumblr!) exponentially, kelsey :heart:
Reply
:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   Writer
great to see something new from you!
Reply
:iconejectionletter:
ejectionletter Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. trying so hard to get inspired
Reply
:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*strong. Now that's just funny ;)


I really like this one :D
Reply
:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*four chords stron
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconejectionletter: More from ejectionletter


Featured in Collections

Poetry Literature by TruthisTruth

Literary Candy by PersephoneFoxx


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
April 14, 2013
File Size
790 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,889
Favourites
95 (who?)
Comments
17
×